I wrote a sonnet for a college English class and was wondering if it is written correctly. I am most concerned about whether I have the right amount of accented and unaccented syllables. If you want to state your opinion of it, that’s fine too. Anyway, here it is:
Heirloom
It was ironic what he gave to me.
The last gift should have been something lasting.
Something packed with meaning and memory,
Not something to keep my music blasting.
Not a small white object soon forgotten
By the electronic trends of today.
Succulent fruit quickly becomes rotten
Without a second thought it’s thrown away.
And mine’s expiration isn’t far off.
It’s bulk and shape are no longer standard
Once labeled useless should I simply scoff,
Or hang it round my neck on a lanyard?
I doubt he was thinking much, my father.
I begged for cash, he bought me a charger.
Thanks for the help guys! My English teacher says that it was written correctly, so most of you were right. There were some people who gave me information on how to write a sonnet, which didn’t really answer my question.
Also, clever rhyme TD Euwaite™. (unfortunately yours fits in that catagory to).
yes, it is right! good job, those are hard to write!!
to one of the comments, slant rhymes are okay to use, slant rhymes are ones in which they dont quite rhyme but sort of, shakespeer even used them!
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July 10th, 2010 at 1:22 am
sounds good, but im no english teacher!
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July 10th, 2010 at 1:53 am
no…now figure out how to fix it
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July 10th, 2010 at 2:20 am
other then me and memory+ father and charger, i think its right
been alternating rhymes and the last 2 lines rhyme and add up to 14 lines
i’m assuming it’s an english sonnet (the rules for italian and other sonnets are different.
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July 10th, 2010 at 2:41 am
father and charger doesnt really rythme?
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July 10th, 2010 at 3:02 am
Well its pretty good except you have to resolve the problem, the end isn’t really a good solution, but otherwise its good.
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July 10th, 2010 at 3:52 am
yes, it is right! good job, those are hard to write!!
to one of the comments, slant rhymes are okay to use, slant rhymes are ones in which they dont quite rhyme but sort of, shakespeer even used them!
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July 10th, 2010 at 4:22 am
a sonnet needs to be no more and no less then 14 lines
go to this site and it will guide you step for step on how write one
http://www.ehow.com/how_3335_write-sonnet.html
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July 10th, 2010 at 4:50 am
The passage seems to say your dad died.
Last gift before he died
expiration
Funny thing is the money you asked for would be gone faster than the charger’s usefulness faded.
As a sonnet goes, I’m not sure of the rules.
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July 10th, 2010 at 5:27 am
Looks good to me
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There were a couple of lines i stumbled on, like the 5th and the 9th, but when i re read them on their own i was able to find the rhythm
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It’s very good!!!
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Mrs. Murray –> The best English teacher ever! lol!
July 10th, 2010 at 6:12 am
You’ve got to make the iambs sing the beat
So folks will clap their hands and tap their feet
And rhyming with good timing must occur
Or else your poetry is quite a bore…
Ta Dah!
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